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Post by Jess on Jun 22, 2005 17:57:51 GMT -5
Haha, that was really good. Is this on Mugglenet? It's definitely good enough.
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Post by Christina on Jun 22, 2005 18:39:47 GMT -5
no, they wont accept it for little things every time
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Post by Jess on Jun 22, 2005 18:46:33 GMT -5
If you want I could look it over for you and try and find those little things. Which chapter do they reject?
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Post by Christina on Jun 23, 2005 9:47:04 GMT -5
ive just been putting the first chapter, i havent finished typing the second. but like, they reject it sometimes cuz they want me to change big things that they think is ooc, but i want it and i dont wanna change that much of my story. but one time they said i had bad grammar and i though my spelling and stuff was really good so iono. but ya, thatd b great if u could look it over for me. do i need 2 email it to u or somethinmg or do u just do it off this site?
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Post by Jess on Jun 23, 2005 9:54:04 GMT -5
I can just use the one on here. If you want to email it to me, you can, but I can just use this one.
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Post by *~PoOkIe~* on Jun 23, 2005 10:35:35 GMT -5
ive just been putting the first chapter, i havent finished typing the second. but like, they reject it sometimes cuz they want me to change big things that they think is ooc, but i want it and i dont wanna change that much of my story. but one time they said i had bad grammar and i though my spelling and stuff was really good so iono. but ya, thatd b great if u could look it over for me. do i need 2 email it to u or somethinmg or do u just do it off this site? thats wat someone wanted me to do...to change some big things and i said hellz no!!! and it ended up being approved just like it was!!!
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Post by Christina on Jun 24, 2005 16:56:32 GMT -5
ya
ok, jess, thanx. oh u kno what actually, i kno i said those were my final changs for this chapter but i think i might of change a few little words in there so let me email it to u.
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Post by Jess on Jun 24, 2005 16:58:16 GMT -5
Okay! I didn't start on it yet because punklil007 was over.
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Post by Christina on Jul 1, 2005 10:57:16 GMT -5
Mrs. Weasley got up from the kitchen table to see who it was. A few seconds later, Mrs. Weasley came back followed by Professor Dumbledore.
"Hello everyone. I trust you all had a good night's sleep? Yes, well, are you all ready to leave for Grimmauld Place?" Dumbledore said.
"Oh, crap, I forgot to finish packing," Ron yelled jumping up from the table.
"Watch your language, Ronald, Mrs. Weasley said. Ginny snorted into her eggs when she heard this. "Now go finish packing and hurry," Mrs. Weasley added. Ron nodded his head and ran out of the room.
"I'll go help," Harry said, getting up slowly. Harry walked up the staircase picking up socks on his way. When he opened the door to Ron's room he saw Ron frantically running around the room, throwing everything in his path into his trunk.
Harry stepped away from the door and said, "Ron, calm down. It's not like they'll leave without us.
"Yeah, I know," Ron said breathing heavily, "But, I don't want Hermione to get mad at me.
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Post by Christina on Jul 27, 2005 16:57:13 GMT -5
"Yeah, I know," Ron said breathing heavily, "But, I don't want Hermione to get mad at me,” he said, bending down to pick something up off the floor. Harry rolled his eyes.
While Harry and Ron were packing Ron’s trunk upstairs, downstairs, Ginny kept glancing at Hermione. Then she finally said, “Hey, Hermione?” “Yeah?” Hermione said, turning to look at Ginny. “Er…now that you’re, well, going out with Ron…what about Krum?” “Oh! I didn’t even think about him, I was so excited.” “Really? Well, what are you going to do about it?” “Well, I guess I’ll have to break up with him.” Ginny looked surprised. “You like Ron that much?” “Well, truthfully, Viktor isn’t really my type. I never really liked him all that much. Plus, with the whole long distance relationship thing, it just wasn’t really working for me.” “Yeah, I see what you mean.” “Anyway, I think Ron and I are more compatible.” “How do you figure that?” Ginny asked confused. “I don’t know. Just a feeling, I guess.”
“So, you really think it will work, then? You guys don’t exactly get along that well,” Harry said. “Yeah, I do. She’s great. We haven’t argued at all. Well, except for that whole Ginny’s relationships thing. But, other than that, it’s great. “Right. Well, good luck with that, then.” “You know, Harry, I was thinking. Well, when I said I wouldn’t get involved in her relationships, I didn’t mean it.” “Yeah, I figured that much. What’s your point?” “Well,” Ron began slowly, “I would want her to date someone I know and…trust. “Uh huh,” Harry said slowly. “And, I was wondering if maybe…you…could…” “What? Are you serious? Ron, I don’t know. I mean Ginny’s great and all, but I never thought of her…in that way,” he finished awkwardly. “I mean,” Harry continued, “she’s more like a sister to me, like Hermione is.” Ron looked disappointed, but said, “I understand. It’s okay. I mean, it was worth a shot, right?” “Yeah, I guess,” Harry said looking around for something to change the subject, “Wait, isn’t Ginny going out with Dean? “Oh, yeah. Well, if you had said yes then I would have, I don’t know, done something.” “Ron, Hermione is right. You really need to butt out,” Harry said jokingly. “I don’t need another lecture,” Ron said as he closed his trunk. Harry heard a pop and then heard Ron yell, “Ouch!” Harry jumped up and asked, “What? What happened?” He ran over to where Ron had been standing. What he saw was a disheveled Ron being helped up by George with Fred standing there laughing. “Shut up, Fred, “Ron said standing up. “Why do you always have to apparate in here?” Ron asked annoyed. Fred and George just shrugged their shoulders and George asked, “So, what’s going on?” “We’re about to leave for Grimmauld Place,” Harry replied. “Oh, we knew that. We’re members.” “So, they finally let you in?” Harry asked. “Yep,” Fred answered grinning widely. He went over and sat on Ron’s bed and asked, “So, what else is new with you guys?” “Ron finally asked Hermione out,” Harry said. “You did?” Fred asked turning to Ron, “Good job little bro.” “Well, how is it going, then?” George asked. “Well, it only just happened today,” Ron replied. “They were holding hands,” Harry said grinning. “Ooooooooooh,” George teased. “Does little Ronniekins have a girlfriend?” Fred mocked. “Shut up,” Ron said giving Harry an evil look, “Come on, mom is going to be mad at me if we don’t get down there soon.” “Okay, we’ll see you there,” Fred said and Harry heard another pop and they were gone. Once they were gone, Ron immediately started mumbling things about Fred and George, and then said, “Alright, let’s go.” They walked back downstairs, each holding an end of the trunk, to see everyone standing by the fireplace, including Fred and George. “Are you ready now?” Mrs. Weasley asked irritated. Ron nodded his head looking at his feet. “Let’s get going then,” Dumbledore said. Harry and Ron walked up to them as Dumbledore sent Mr. Weasley into the fireplace. Mrs. Weasley came next, then Ginny, Fred, George, Lupin, and Hermione. “Ron, you next,” Dumbledore said. Ron walked into the fireplace and yelled, “Twelve Grimmauld Place,” and he disappeared in the flames and smoke. “Harry,” Dumbledore said, “Remus told me you have been practicing your Occlumency. I am very proud of you for that.” “Thank you, sir. Voldemort hasn’t been able to penetrate my mind since last year.” “That’s very good and we want to make sure he won’t ever be able to do that. We need to make you more skilled at Occlumency, and possibly, if we get that far, Legilimency,” Dumbledore said checking his watch, “So, I will be continuing your lessons when school starts.” “Okay,” Harry replied “Good, now go ahead,” Dumbledore said pointing to the fireplace. Harry walked into the fireplace and yelled, “Twelve Grimmauld Place.” He felt the flames licking his face. He immediately felt dizzy and wanted it to stop. When it finally did, he landed on the floor and seconds later, Dumbledore appeared right beside him after Harry heard a pop. Apparently, Dumbledore didn’t like traveling by Floo powder either.
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Post by *~PoOkIe~* on Jul 27, 2005 17:51:43 GMT -5
cool i like that chapter except for the whole R/Hr thing...hey read mah new fic Christina
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Post by Christina on Jul 28, 2005 11:21:41 GMT -5
what new fic?
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Post by *~PoOkIe~* on Jul 28, 2005 20:10:58 GMT -5
it's on here...Undeniable Forbidden Love
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Post by punklil007 on Aug 11, 2005 11:57:00 GMT -5
ooooooooo...I just read this last part. I haven't really been following the whole thing but that was AWESOME!!! PMS PMS...Post More Soon...um...awkward... POST MORE NOW!!!PMNPMNPMNPMNPMNPMN
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